Are you pulling my leg? Is there anything else going on than title screens?
Until 0:40 the drawings were good, but it looked too much like cut out animation. You can improve that e.g. by increasing the size of the character at 0:12 as she moves towards the camera. This would give a more 3D feeling.
The voice over had too much pathos for my taste.
But after 0:40 the animation is top notch: Well drawn lights and shadow, good timing and fluid animation. Keep that up! Some professional studios produce worse stuff than that.
Thank you very much. Appreciate the feedback and the kind words. The encouragement means a lot.
You have a story that works well on its own without pictures. And then you have drawings that are capable of telling a story on their own. But by putting them together you make it worse.
E.g. the narration tells about the candle that the viewer has been seeing for several seconds. This adds redundancy and makes it more boring.
Trust your drawings to tell the story as far as possible and only narrate what they don't show.
Cheers Rotten-Carrot - that's some really helpful feedback!
I agree that it's definitely "over-narrated" in some areas. I'm hoping to find the ideal 'balance', but it may take some time. Thanks again for the critique!
The image composition is great! First the attention goes to the woman that to the man diving down to her and the to the guy on the pier. That creates some tension and leaves room for imagination.
The poles of the pier could do with some light refraction - The part outside of the water would be tilted to the left/towards the viewer. Also you wouldn't see the whole pier all the way to the shore but only inside a circle like you did with the skyline.
Last time i noticed that i am making very minimalistic images. It makes me feel that is still uncompleted. Do you have any idea how to make pictures more detalic? I have a big problem with that.
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